Conan the Grammarian is having a fit, so if I may add a few teeny tiny suggestions...?
... serving in and around the Los Angeles
area
Either homes and businesses or home and business (not plural on one and singular on the other)
Carpet can hold
its face weight (not
it's)
EPA recommends cleaning for health is essentially the same as
Reducing indoor contaminants leads to a healthier environment - combine the two into a single benefit. Perhaps "Reducing indoor contaminants by getting your carpets cleaned is recommended by the EPA and leads to a healthier indoor environment" would work?
Might even throw in the fact that the carpet is the single biggest filter in the house. That's a great way to make the customer visualize just how much nastiness is in there.
"Johnny On The Spot is proud to call Los Angeles home, and it is our goal to see that your (Los Angeles) home remains clean and free of germs and toxins" - take out the second Los Angeles (in parenthesis), it's not necessary; emphasize
your home with italics instead.
"your employees' health
is never compromised" (not are)
"To learn more about our [service areas] in San Pedro, Redondo Beach, Palos Verdes, Manhattan Beach, LA & other service areas, click
here." - replace [service areas] with services.
