My new business web site!

Johnny Bravo

Hacking my way though life, one room at a time.
Apr 25, 2011
24,201
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San Pedro, Ca
TheJohnnyOnTheSpot.Com
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John Sheridan
Business Location
United States

Johnny Bravo

Hacking my way though life, one room at a time.
Apr 25, 2011
24,201
8,750
113
San Pedro, Ca
TheJohnnyOnTheSpot.Com
Real Name
John Sheridan
Business Location
United States

Johnny Bravo

Hacking my way though life, one room at a time.
Apr 25, 2011
24,201
8,750
113
San Pedro, Ca
TheJohnnyOnTheSpot.Com
Real Name
John Sheridan
Business Location
United States
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The view details feature didn't work on my phone
@Johnny Bravo

The details link for each service is not working for me either. I am using an 8S+ (Android) if that helps.

But once that hicup is fixed...it is going to be sweet! I like how it is not cluttered.
 
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Check all your pages too for little coding hiccups.

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Conan the Grammarian is having a fit, so if I may add a few teeny tiny suggestions...?

... serving in and around the Los Angeles area

Either homes and businesses or home and business (not plural on one and singular on the other)

Carpet can hold its face weight (not it's)

EPA recommends cleaning for health is essentially the same as Reducing indoor contaminants leads to a healthier environment - combine the two into a single benefit. Perhaps "Reducing indoor contaminants by getting your carpets cleaned is recommended by the EPA and leads to a healthier indoor environment" would work?

Might even throw in the fact that the carpet is the single biggest filter in the house. That's a great way to make the customer visualize just how much nastiness is in there.


"Johnny On The Spot is proud to call Los Angeles home, and it is our goal to see that your (Los Angeles) home remains clean and free of germs and toxins" - take out the second Los Angeles (in parenthesis), it's not necessary; emphasize your home with italics instead.

"your employees' health is never compromised" (not are)

"To learn more about our [service areas] in San Pedro, Redondo Beach, Palos Verdes, Manhattan Beach, LA & other service areas, click here." - replace [service areas] with services.
 
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Matt Smith

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There's a lot of white space under the "JOHNNY ON THE SPOT CARPET CLEANING NEWS" area. In the table with your business hours, the font color should be lighter, or white to stand out. Grey on blue does not look good.
Otherwise, I do like your homepage.
 
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carpetmaxllc

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Overall looks neat but it took few seconds to load on mobile. Also embedded video took me to YouTube. It should play where it is(without suggesting similar videos when it ends, which is normally your competetors content)
 

Michael W

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No SSL/https which apparently can affect pagerank and is generally nice to have from a security point of view - https://webmasters.googleblog.com/2014/08/https-as-ranking-signal.html

I agree with having the videos embedded, it's a nice touch.
I also maybe broke the captcha on the webform on the home page by entering a bunch of garbage and clicking submit a whole bunch of times. Eventually it came up with this message
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I don't know if this is as big a problem anymore as it used to, but I wouldn't have my email address in plaintext on a website. I used to see people use an image of their email address so that it couldn't be scraped.

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The submit testimonials page is also unfinished

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I'm bloody nitpicking here though, the site looks awesome otherwise. I'm not a big fan of the web2.0/wordpress style homepage but I understand that clients love it and that's what matters. Beats a sucker like me who still hasn't setup his site after 6 months...
 
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mjb4ex

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Conan the Grammarian is having a fit, so if I may add a few teeny tiny suggestions...?

... serving in and around the Los Angeles area

Either homes and businesses or home and business (not plural on one and singular on the other)

Carpet can hold its face weight (not it's)

EPA recommends cleaning for health is essentially the same as Reducing indoor contaminants leads to a healthier environment - combine the two into a single benefit. Perhaps "Reducing indoor contaminants by getting your carpets cleaned is recommended by the EPA and leads to a healthier indoor environment" would work?

Might even throw in the fact that the carpet is the single biggest filter in the house. That's a great way to make the customer visualize just how much nastiness is in there.


"Johnny On The Spot is proud to call Los Angeles home, and it is our goal to see that your (Los Angeles) home remains clean and free of germs and toxins" - take out the second Los Angeles (in parenthesis), it's not necessary; emphasize your home with italics instead.

"your employees' health is never compromised" (not are)

"To learn more about our [service areas] in San Pedro, Redondo Beach, Palos Verdes, Manhattan Beach, LA & other service areas, click here." - replace [service areas] with services.
I need to send my emails to you to you to preview....
 

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I love the clean look! You have some areas where you can add in some compelling copy to grab your reader. Good opportunities to sell your services even more and hook potential clients.

This is how it looks on a desktop. I think those big empty spaces on the bars covering the photos could use some content.

Also - on a desktop, your phone number is teeny tiny at the top of the page. Couldn't hurt to have it in a couple other places on the site so no one has to squint to figure out how to call you.

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Mrs.SpeedySteamer

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No SSL/https which apparently can affect pagerank and is generally nice to have from a security point of view - https://webmasters.googleblog.com/2014/08/https-as-ranking-signal.html

I agree with having the videos embedded, it's a nice touch.
I also maybe broke the captcha on the webform on the home page by entering a bunch of garbage and clicking submit a whole bunch of times. Eventually it came up with this message
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I don't know if this is as big a problem anymore as it used to, but I wouldn't have my email address in plaintext on a website. I used to see people use an image of their email address so that it couldn't be scraped.

View attachment 75124

The submit testimonials page is also unfinished

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I'm bloody nitpicking here though, the site looks awesome otherwise. I'm not a big fan of the web2.0/wordpress style homepage but I understand that clients love it and that's what matters. Beats a sucker like me who still hasn't setup his site after 6 months...

Thank you! The SSL is something Johnny's host or Register can provide him with - I am neither...

The e-mail is a concern that I will get addressed shortly - Thank you for catching that!
Conan the Grammarian is having a fit, so if I may add a few teeny tiny suggestions...?

... serving in and around the Los Angeles area

Either homes and businesses or home and business (not plural on one and singular on the other)

Carpet can hold its face weight (not it's)

EPA recommends cleaning for health is essentially the same as Reducing indoor contaminants leads to a healthier environment - combine the two into a single benefit. Perhaps "Reducing indoor contaminants by getting your carpets cleaned is recommended by the EPA and leads to a healthier indoor environment" would work?

Might even throw in the fact that the carpet is the single biggest filter in the house. That's a great way to make the customer visualize just how much nastiness is in there.


"Johnny On The Spot is proud to call Los Angeles home, and it is our goal to see that your (Los Angeles) home remains clean and free of germs and toxins" - take out the second Los Angeles (in parenthesis), it's not necessary; emphasize your home with italics instead.

"your employees' health is never compromised" (not are)

"To learn more about our [service areas] in San Pedro, Redondo Beach, Palos Verdes, Manhattan Beach, LA & other service areas, clickhere." - replace [service areas] with services.
Thank you - will look into every thing you pointed out...
It's not finish? I am not being redirected to any other pages than the first one. And what is the scope of the blue empty Windows on it?
Could you screen shot and share with me the image and the type of phone you're using?

@Johnny Bravo

The details link for each service is not working for me either. I am using an 8S+ (Android) if that helps.

But once that hicup is fixed...it is going to be sweet! I like how it is not cluttered.
The view details feature didn't work on my phone

There's a lot of white space under the "JOHNNY ON THE SPOT CARPET CLEANING NEWS" area. In the table with your business hours, the font color should be lighter, or white to stand out. Grey on blue does not look good.
Otherwise, I do like your homepage.

Thanks!
Check all your pages too for little coding hiccups.

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You all are so awesome... Thank you so much for catching my mistakes...

@Johnny Bravo - I go away for a week to a Facebook Marketing Training course and return to fixes for your website... My apologies - will get on them ASAP - but very thankful for all the feedback...

~Tiffany